Wednesday, November 17

Development = A High Score

How can you increase your independent essay score? Simple. Development. Development. Development. Most independent essays score low because there is not enough specific information (details). Essays that score 4 and above have lots of supporting details, especially in the body paragraphs. Essays that score 4 or less have fewer details. Remember: Details (examples) support and develop your opinion. This is true of integrated essays as well. Those integrated essays that score above 4 have lots of details from the reading and the lecture. Those that score less than 4 are missing important details. Remember: Fewer details = a lack of language use = a lower score.

Why is development so important when writing a TOEFL essay? Because, as mentioned, development is directly related to language use. The more you develop a body paragraph, the more you demonstrate language use proficiency. Let's put it to the test. Look at this photo, then read the two passages that follow.



This is a photo of a woman in a dress and short hair. She has a necklace and is not smiling. She looks young. She is ready for a club or something. 

Now read this passage.

In this black-and-white photograph, a poised young woman, probably a flapper, stares defiantly off screen with probing eyes. Around her slender neck hangs a string of exquisite pearls. She clutches them against her breast, pulling them down as if she herself were on a chain. Her deep black eyes, set against ivory skin, radiate confidence, a desire to tempt and be tempted. Where is she going in that sexy, shoulderless dress, that none-too subtle invitation? What is she thinking under that toss of naughty curls? We'll never know. One thing is for certain: the devil is in the details.

Which of these two passages would score higher? It's obvious, right? Development. Development. Development.

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