From this opinion-based TOEFL essay prompt...
Prompt: We need zoos. Do you agree or disagree? Why? Give examples and reasons to support your opinion.
I teach you how to write an essay that scores 3...
Personally, I am agree. I think that we need zoos.
For example, when I was 12, my teacher took us to the zoo. I have never seen wild animals before. I just read about them on books or on the TV. But seeing them in real life was amazing, especially the liones. On the TV, they look small, but seeing them so close they are really big.
Now I have the families and we have been to zoo at summer. My wife makes a picnick and we spend all day there. My kids love taking pictures and learning all about the animals, specially the gorillas.
Also, zoos look after endangered animals like pandas. I saw two in the Washington DC zoo last year and they had a baby. If there were no zoos, the pandas would disappear because we are taking their landes away.
For those reasons, I think that we need zoos.
Then I teach you how to revise your essay to score 4...
Personally, I agree. I think that we need zoos.
For example, when I was 12, my teacher took us to the zoo. I had never seen wild animals before. I just read about them on books or on the TV. But seeing them in real life was amazing, especially the lion. On the TV, they look small, but seeing them so close they are really big. By going to the zoo, I definitely saw things in a whole new light.
Now I have a family and we go to the zoo every summer. My wife makes a picnic and we spend all day there. My kids love taking pictures and learning all about the animals, especially the gorillas. This is good for my children. Best of all, they can leave the internet and the TV at home.
Also, zoos look after endangered animals like pandas. I saw two in the Washington DC zoo last year and they had a baby. If there were no zoos, the pandas would disappear because we are taking their land away. However, in a zoo the pandas are safe. It is not perfect, but without zoos there might not be any pandas left.
For those reasons, I think that we need zoos.
Then I teach you advanced rhetorical strategies so you can score 5!
Do we or don’t we need zoos? Personally, I agree with the statement. I think that we need zoos. We need zoos because they are educational, they are fun for families and they protect endangered animals.
Zoos are educational. For example, when I was 12, my teacher took us to the zoo in Berlin. I had never seen wild animals before. I had just read about them in books and seen them on the TV. But seeing them in real life was amazing, especially the lions. On TV, they looked so small, but seeing them alive they were really big. By going to the zoo, I definitely saw things in a whole new light.
Zoos are also fun for families. For example, I have a family and we always go to the zoo every summer. My wife makes a picnic and we spend all day there. My kids love taking pictures and learning all about the animals, especially the gorillas. Being outside is good for my children. Best of all, they can leave the internet and the TV at home.
Finally, zoos protect endangered animals. For example, I saw two pandas in the Washington DC zoo last year and they had a baby. If there were no zoos, the pandas would disappear because we are taking their land away. However, in a zoo the pandas are safe. It is not perfect, but without zoos there might not be any pandas left.
For those reasons, I believe that we need zoos because they are educational, they are fun for families and they protect endangered animals. If you want to have fun and learn something new, you should go to a zoo.
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